Thanks for the fascinating story! The sounds and locations are very atmospheric, as if I've never heard anything like it before (it's like it's even more intense than in Eternum). Apparently, you create the locations yourself? The characters are memorable, each with their own unique character and appearance. I like the elf Miriel the most. Although Anya is also very nice :) I will keep an eye on your updates and wish you good luck! By the way, the Debios translator translated it very well, I liked the Russian localization from it.
Top notch game btw , from story telling to characters and adult scenes , everything is too good . Just one thing to add up that can you add some dialogues and choice dialogues during adult scenes, that would be great to make scenes more enjoyable , Other than that great game . It shows that you've put a great effort in making the game . My best wishes for the game❤️🙌
Your first project, you say? Buddy—you’re cooking dangerously close to something special here. You’re toeing the line between hidden gem and “the formula.”
Yes, I’ll say it—Eternum level. Sorry for the comparison, but you’re really onto something.
Visuals, story, soundtrack—you name it, and you’re practically nailing it. But where your work truly shines is in the writing—especially the characters. I caught myself thinking, “Not a lot is happening narratively right now, but why am I loving every second of this?” That’s a good sign. You’ve got some serious strengths here, and with a little polish? Dangerous.
Also, thank you for expanding my Spotify playlist. And maybe a few other things. ;)
Constructive Feedback (With Spoilers)
Please take this in the best way—I’m giving this because I care about the project. Nothing would make me happier than seeing Astreon blow up.
1. The Time-Skip Curveball
The early structure (mission → flashback → time skip) is fine, but the reveal that the MC has a grown child came out of nowhere for me. I had to double-check if I missed something. A few breadcrumbs would go a long way:
• Maybe mention the adoption during the mission briefing or the call with his wife.
• Something subtle: “We got approved for the program” or “We're on the waiting list.”
• Even just a throwaway line like “you’ll be a great dad” would’ve helped plant that seed.
I understand that the MC is private, but maybe he wasn’t always. Maybe his wife’s disappearance is what shut him down emotionally. That’s a perfect character beat.
2. The Alien Plot Escalation
The story jumps from 0 to 100 really fast when the alien plotline kicks off. Again, not necessarily bad—but maybe seed the tension a bit earlier. You did do this with the first mission’s objective connecting back to the larger plot, which was clever. Maybe sprinkle in one or two more threads so the payoff feels like a dot-connecting moment, not a plot detour.
3. Let Grief Echo
The son’s death… hurts. You made me feel that.
But after the vision/dream sequence? He sort of fades out of the narrative.
My suggestion:
• Let the MC’s grief breathe. Maybe he looks at an old photo, a keepsake—nothing big, just a small, quiet moment. Those wordless beats can be louder than any monologue.
• Use that grief as fuel. He’s not trying to save the galaxy—he’s trying to burn it down in search of justice.
• Add a layer of survivor’s guilt, especially with Olivia. Maybe Lora, too. Everyone handles loss differently. Let us see that.
This doesn’t have to dominate the plot—but grief should leave an echo. It’s your best emotional weapon.
4. Make Time Feel Like Time
Right now, the timeline feels short. Which makes some of the deeper emotional and romantic beats feel slightly rushed. My advice?
• Add small time jumps here and there. Let us feel like months or weeks are passing, not days.
• This helps romantic arcs too—especially for characters like Miriel or Flora, who feel like slower burns.
• You nailed Kalestra. Introduced later, and somehow my favorite. Go figure.
5. Olivia, Anya, and the Cast Balance
• I’m not sure what Anya’s role is yet—is she a love interest? If so, how does she fit into the pacing/arc?
• Also, Olivia felt a bit sidelined, and her lewd scene felt like a quick patch. It was a great scene, don’t get me wrong—it just felt like a “don’t forget about Olivia” moment, not a natural story beat.
• That said, after the kiss with Miriel and Flora’s emotionally vulnerable moment—followed later by the scene where the MC hugs her from behind—the writing felt like it began to shift. It was as if you lost a bit of the narrative footing that had been so strong up to that point.
Final Thoughts
I’m writing my own project and hoping to turn it into a VN someday, so trust me—I get it. I know how hard this is.
There’s a joke that says:
Devs are coders first, artists second, and writers last.
You don’t fit that mold. Your writing is dangerously good.
Astreon doesn’t feel like just a visual novel. It feels like someone gives a damn. And in this sea of forgettable projects, that means something.
Keep it up. You’ve got something here—and I’ve got a hell of a lot of faith in where you’ll take it. ;)
For some reason when i finished talking to the man in act two (the one that disappears after talking) it says cannot find akt2chapter8ch this was the gofile pc version.
Great game so far. The visuals are awesome, it must take a lot of effort to make it look this good, props to the author. I just got one question, the "???" girl got one of her eye closed most of scenes, first I thought she is missing one eye, but then in one scene she has got both eyes open? Is it just a mistake when you were making the scene you forgot to close her eye? Or is it intentional, and she just keeps one of her eyes closed most of the time for fun? :D
It looks like there is a queue that any major update requires a review before its listed as a major update. It could take hours to a month and is inconsistent between users. My guess is that the more money you've raked in for them, the faster they process your place in line.
and that's wrong tbh, major update can be published at least 1 time per month not faster. :D And not matter how much money you earn from the game, or how much they earn xD
In version 0.3 of the game, when switching to the Chinese translation, many sentences remain untranslated, and some character dialogues use special fonts that are difficult to read clearly
I downloaded it from itch using the first download link. In the early parts of the story, there are several places that aren't translated. When it comes to the alien part, I can only see the text normally if I set the language to English during the dialog with RAY, as shown in the attached image.
I got this error when I was using Chinese on the Android version
I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred. While running game code: Exception: Could not find font 'tl/chinese/font/方正行楷简体.ttf'. -- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------ Full traceback: File "tl/chinese/script.rpyc", line 7, in script File "renpy/ast.py", line 2579, in execute File "renpy/ast.py", line 621, in execute File "renpy/exports\sayexports.py", line 132, in say File "renpy/character.py", line 1455, in __call__ File "renpy/character.py", line 1106, in do_display File "renpy/character.py", line 803, in display_say File "renpy/ui.py", line 301, in interact File "renpy/display\core.py", line 2215, in interact File "renpy/display\core.py", line 2879, in interact_core File "renpy/display\core.py", line 1381, in draw_screen File "render.pyx", line 486, in renpy.display.render.render_screen File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 900, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 900, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 900, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\screen.py", line 752, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 900, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 1457, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 1171, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/display\layout.py", line 1457, in render File "render.pyx", line 170, in renpy.display.render.render File "render.pyx", line 260, in renpy.display.render.render File "renpy/text\text.py", line 2600, in render File "renpy/text\text.py", line 767, in __init__ File "renpy/text\text.py", line 340, in glyphs File "renpy/text\font.py", line 745, in get_font File "renpy/text\font.py", line 673, in load_face Exception: Could not find font 'tl/chinese/font/方正行楷简体.ttf'.
Congrats on the new version release! Started playing it a bit, looking pretty good. Noticed some changes to dialogue since the last time i played it, but you do your thing! Sidenote, i will never understand how are some people able to churn out thousands of renders lol, i was barelly able to do around 250 for my project and that was already stretching it. Still gotta a lot to learn and my PC sucks though so its a slow process for me. Maybe that's all it takes, a powerful rig, hm. Anyhow, great work on this, as always!
for sure you allowed, just click download, in one of the button, it will transfer you to the downloading site, and than choice version, pc android or Mac:D
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Thanks for the fascinating story! The sounds and locations are very atmospheric, as if I've never heard anything like it before (it's like it's even more intense than in Eternum). Apparently, you create the locations yourself? The characters are memorable, each with their own unique character and appearance. I like the elf Miriel the most. Although Anya is also very nice :) I will keep an eye on your updates and wish you good luck! By the way, the Debios translator translated it very well, I liked the Russian localization from it.
How many acts are there in v0.3
Top notch game btw , from story telling to characters and adult scenes , everything is too good . Just one thing to add up that can you add some dialogues and choice dialogues during adult scenes, that would be great to make scenes more enjoyable , Other than that great game . It shows that you've put a great effort in making the game . My best wishes for the game❤️🙌
It's beyond my expectations! Is it really your first project?
10/10
A good game and story, so are these musics.
And i found out why chinese translation has’t been fully translated, the translated text wasn’t changed when the original text was modified.
I’ve uploaded the corrected file for your reference. The link is below:https://drive.google.com/file/d/10YWgE1mpf2zy4twK2OojTRALZCXZADPT/view?usp=sharing
can't wait for more absolute cinema
Wow…
Slow clap. Insert surprise Pikachu face.
Your first project, you say? Buddy—you’re cooking dangerously close to something special here. You’re toeing the line between hidden gem and “the formula.”
Yes, I’ll say it—Eternum level. Sorry for the comparison, but you’re really onto something.
Visuals, story, soundtrack—you name it, and you’re practically nailing it. But where your work truly shines is in the writing—especially the characters. I caught myself thinking, “Not a lot is happening narratively right now, but why am I loving every second of this?” That’s a good sign. You’ve got some serious strengths here, and with a little polish? Dangerous.
Also, thank you for expanding my Spotify playlist. And maybe a few other things. ;)
Constructive Feedback (With Spoilers)
Please take this in the best way—I’m giving this because I care about the project. Nothing would make me happier than seeing Astreon blow up.
1. The Time-Skip Curveball
The early structure (mission → flashback → time skip) is fine, but the reveal that the MC has a grown child came out of nowhere for me. I had to double-check if I missed something. A few breadcrumbs would go a long way:
• Maybe mention the adoption during the mission briefing or the call with his wife.
• Something subtle: “We got approved for the program” or “We're on the waiting list.”
• Even just a throwaway line like “you’ll be a great dad” would’ve helped plant that seed.
I understand that the MC is private, but maybe he wasn’t always. Maybe his wife’s disappearance is what shut him down emotionally. That’s a perfect character beat.
2. The Alien Plot Escalation
The story jumps from 0 to 100 really fast when the alien plotline kicks off. Again, not necessarily bad—but maybe seed the tension a bit earlier. You did do this with the first mission’s objective connecting back to the larger plot, which was clever. Maybe sprinkle in one or two more threads so the payoff feels like a dot-connecting moment, not a plot detour.
3. Let Grief Echo
The son’s death… hurts. You made me feel that.
But after the vision/dream sequence? He sort of fades out of the narrative.
My suggestion:
• Let the MC’s grief breathe. Maybe he looks at an old photo, a keepsake—nothing big, just a small, quiet moment. Those wordless beats can be louder than any monologue.
• Use that grief as fuel. He’s not trying to save the galaxy—he’s trying to burn it down in search of justice.
• Add a layer of survivor’s guilt, especially with Olivia. Maybe Lora, too. Everyone handles loss differently. Let us see that.
This doesn’t have to dominate the plot—but grief should leave an echo. It’s your best emotional weapon.
4. Make Time Feel Like Time
Right now, the timeline feels short. Which makes some of the deeper emotional and romantic beats feel slightly rushed. My advice?
• Add small time jumps here and there. Let us feel like months or weeks are passing, not days.
• This helps romantic arcs too—especially for characters like Miriel or Flora, who feel like slower burns.
• You nailed Kalestra. Introduced later, and somehow my favorite. Go figure.
5. Olivia, Anya, and the Cast Balance
• I’m not sure what Anya’s role is yet—is she a love interest? If so, how does she fit into the pacing/arc?
• Also, Olivia felt a bit sidelined, and her lewd scene felt like a quick patch. It was a great scene, don’t get me wrong—it just felt like a “don’t forget about Olivia” moment, not a natural story beat.
• That said, after the kiss with Miriel and Flora’s emotionally vulnerable moment—followed later by the scene where the MC hugs her from behind—the writing felt like it began to shift. It was as if you lost a bit of the narrative footing that had been so strong up to that point.
Final Thoughts
I’m writing my own project and hoping to turn it into a VN someday, so trust me—I get it. I know how hard this is.
There’s a joke that says:
Devs are coders first, artists second, and writers last.
You don’t fit that mold. Your writing is dangerously good.
Astreon doesn’t feel like just a visual novel. It feels like someone gives a damn. And in this sea of forgettable projects, that means something.
Keep it up. You’ve got something here—and I’ve got a hell of a lot of faith in where you’ll take it. ;)
For some reason when i finished talking to the man in act two (the one that disappears after talking) it says cannot find akt2chapter8ch this was the gofile pc version.
Is this just me?
just choice Miriel path xD
Holy shit does that girl have an SF Shock Tramp Stamp???
Great game so far. The visuals are awesome, it must take a lot of effort to make it look this good, props to the author. I just got one question, the "???" girl got one of her eye closed most of scenes, first I thought she is missing one eye, but then in one scene she has got both eyes open? Is it just a mistake when you were making the scene you forgot to close her eye? Or is it intentional, and she just keeps one of her eyes closed most of the time for fun? :D
I just forgot to close her eyes there xD
You seem to have gotten a boost into the newest category with your latest update. Any idea how you were able to do that? I did an update and nothing.
dm me in discord about that.
It looks like there is a queue that any major update requires a review before its listed as a major update. It could take hours to a month and is inconsistent between users. My guess is that the more money you've raked in for them, the faster they process your place in line.
and that's wrong tbh, major update can be published at least 1 time per month not faster. :D And not matter how much money you earn from the game, or how much they earn xD
Gotcha so if I had just waited a few days it would be fine. Sigh. Shot myself in the foot there.
yeah, or wrote msg to them in discord
may i ask should i plaqy this first or the prologue? the other game
this one.
yeah this is fire cool looking mc and story (this is my opinion) and quite rare type of mc, really got me hooked.
glad to hear it, and glad than you enjoyed this thing :D
whats the song used when he opens his locker sounds familiar but i cant place it
edit or perhaps a playlist for whats currently in i love all the music thus far
In discord you can ask about music :D
did you get inspiration from eternum by any chance? very similar, loving the game also <3
if youre saying you played eternum AND you love this? Holy shit dude thats the comment i needed, downloading it rn :D
tysmm
Sadly no :D
Story is actually amazing, got me hooked
Lovely, and glad to hear it :D
I love the russian and different music, cuz it is amazing and I get to have new songs :D
In version 0.3 of the game, when switching to the Chinese translation, many sentences remain untranslated, and some character dialogues use special fonts that are difficult to read clearly
Thank you, I'll see what I can do about it.
Кто-то про*бал русский язык. На быстрой перемотки до момента на скрине. "Ни слова по-русски." :D
Хотя меню и кнопки переведены. Ну и другие языки на месте. Собсна я не привередливый, могу и на английском поиграть. Просто держу в курсе)
Ну, как-бы да. Об этом знаю, фикс будет немного позднее. А пока довольствуемся тем что есть. (Сорки за это хД)
Are there no mega dowload? Or are these the only download links
Sadly no, have some problem with Mega rn
Thanks
0.3 is phenomenal.
Thx :D
Peak
Lovely :D
this is a masterpiece，I hope everything goes well for the author.
Pretty good, more or less. Thx :D
Its Chinese translation has not been fully translated, I hope it can be verified
Tbh, it must be full translated. Last time when I checked it actually was.
为啥手机上玩就一直提示代码错误
已修复，现在一切都应正常运行。
I got this error when I was using Chinese on the Android version
Fixed, sry for that.
Это шедевр! Желаю вам дорасти до крупных дорогих полноценных 3D игр на ПК. По сюжету этой новеллы можно такой хит сделать на самом деле
Может быть, а может и нет. Но спасибо за добрые слова, и рад что вам понравилось :D
you have doomed us all
Congrats on the new version release! Started playing it a bit, looking pretty good. Noticed some changes to dialogue since the last time i played it, but you do your thing! Sidenote, i will never understand how are some people able to churn out thousands of renders lol, i was barelly able to do around 250 for my project and that was already stretching it. Still gotta a lot to learn and my PC sucks though so its a slow process for me. Maybe that's all it takes, a powerful rig, hm. Anyhow, great work on this, as always!
You good man, it just.... I dont have personal life, thats all. Dont be like me xD And thx for you kind word :D
make a yaoi version pls
Please don't
Deal.
Nope.
One hundred percent, unequivocally, absolutely fucking BASED.
how far along is this game to completion
just another 0.7 version, and we done.
no ntr please...
Never.
Whoop whoop
You might say you`re a bit "whoop whoop" then... I`m a bit "Whoop whoop" myself. Altho I`m a bit more "Whoop" than "whoop" these days.
¿Está en español?
Lamentablemente no
Im new to the whole pc gaming, how does one download these? not sure if im allowed to ask tha
for sure you allowed, just click download, in one of the button, it will transfer you to the downloading site, and than choice version, pc android or Mac:D
figured it out lol. Thanks!
Hi just want to ask does this game have a s scene or just a novel?
it has everything...
Fr? NTR?
why the downvotes? maybe brother trynna avoid it
bruh not that.. all good things...
join the discord channel too by the way.
Yup, we have few scene there :D
May I know where I can find the nsfw vers.?
Isn't this the NSFW version? Thought prologue was SFW
This one nsfw vesrion